"Forgotten"
You Wanton, quiet memory that haunts me all the while
In order to remind me of her who love I send
Perhaps when you caress me sweetly, I will smile
You are my confidante today, my very dearest friend.
You sweet rememberance, tell a fairy tale
About my girl who's lost and gone, you see.
Tell, tell the one about the golden grail
And call the swallow, bring her back to me.
Fly somewhere bald to her and ask her, soft and low,
If she thinks of me sometimes with love.
If she is well and ask her, too, before you go
If I am still her dearest, precious dove.
And hurry back, don't lose your way,
So I can think of other things,
But you were too lovely, perhaps, to stay.
I loved you once. Good-bye, my love
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First of all, great job! At first glance, the butterfly is very appealing to the eyes. It is full of content like pictures, drawings, color, and symbolism.
ReplyDeleteFirst Impression: Great. The butterfly looks as if a lot of work was put into planning and creating it. The first thing that the Audience would notice are the pictures on the wings, they contrast each other, which gives you a good start in terms of getting a person's attention.
Tag wise: You have the required amount of tags, and the Additional information. But you should have some text under your images to explain how they relate to the poem while teaching the audience about Terezin. You embed the quotes correctly, which is nice. I also like how you explain everything you need to explain without making the tag seem as if it is lacking content.
Overall, I would mainly explain the addition sources.
Your butterfly is really unique. It's cool how you chose to do paper mache instead of just something simple like using glue, because I agree that it doesn't look sloppy, it looks really well done. One of your symbolic representations, the hands, are a good addition to the butterfly. It really shows the separation that was being expressed through your poem, especially with Hitler in the middle bringing them apart. An explanation of yours that was well written was the explanation as to why you chose to make one side of the butterfly brighter than the other. It’s like you tried to see it from a Jew’s perspective, and then tried to recreate what they found hope in; which I think is a really great idea. All in all, I can tell that you really put work into this, and you should be proud.
ReplyDeleteVery creative butterfly Andrew! I love how there are two sides of the butterfly. One side is colorful while the other is mainly black and white. Your explanation about using dark colors on one side was very clear and explicit. I would agree that dark colors definitely do not symbolize hope or happiness. I like the fact that you put Hitler in the middle to show the separation between the child and the loved one. Great drawing by the way. One suggestion is that you write a description for each picture to explain why you added it and what it depicts. Overall, it's a great butterfly and you work very hard!
ReplyDeleteHey Andrew. When first looking at your butterfly, I could tell that this looked like it was very time consuming. I commend and admire your use of paper mache instead of just paper. It's something different, and it fits your butterfly really well. I also think it is really cool that you decided to do a collage for your butterfly. Your tags for your butterfly are greatly written, and very concise. Great job on that. Some things I may change for your tags would be to explain why you had those images, instead of them just sitting there. I would also suggest putting what you were explaining on your tags, as it was slightly difficult to figure out. Otherwise, you did an awesome job on that butterfly. Awesome job!
ReplyDeleteI just realized I was pretty vague on what I was trying to explain to change. What I was trying to convey would be to write (this is what I'm talking about) and then explain. Sorry for the inconvenience.
DeleteYour butterfly was one of my favorites and is very creative. I really liked how the paper mache looked like a bunch of tiny images all stuck together, which showed how the child's mind is filled with bad memories on the left side. I also liked how you had two sides, one happy and sunny and with the woman, and one dark and evil. Another good part was the drawing of Hitler in the middle. It looked very good, and also showed how Hitler was the one who was stopping this child from being happy. Your butterfly looks great, and I could tell you put a lot of effort into it.
ReplyDeleteYour butterfly Project is amazing in my opinion. I think that using paper mache to glue the newspaper on the butterfly is creative and smart. The explanations for your butterfly are very explicit and it's easy to understand what you are trying to say. I like how you drew Hitler in the middle, and two hands reaching for each other because that is the main idea of the poem and it's relevant. Overall the butterfly is one of the best I've seen, it's creative, explicit, nice, interesting, and unique.
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